I don't really know what inspired this one... But let me know what you think.
It’s a monster
Bottled up
Bottled up inside
One little shake
The pressure is rising
Threatening to explode
Little by little
It is overflowing
Overflowing and hurting
Hurting those I love
I want to tell them
It’s not me
It’s the monster
The monster inside
One more shake
The pressures too much
It’s exploded
I look at the damage
Broken hearts
Worth loving
Broken hands
Worth holding
Broken feet
Worth kissing
All damaged
All because of
This monster.
-7/31/07-
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Hi Chloe,
Interesting poem with the image of anger as a monster hidden in the depth of our selves-dangerous and depraved. I think you might want to experiment with using this powerful image throughout this poem...What do monsters do? How do they smell? What do they sound like? What is dripping from their lips? Etc... Are they really as menacing as they seem?
Using image/metaphor is a key writing strategy, especially important in poetry. I like reading poetry because of the economy of the words (few words, big impact....mostly because of the careful choice of images and the way poets labor over the selection of the one and truest word.) I find writing poetry challenging for all the same reasons. And, consequently, I don't do it as often as I "should."
Love you,
Mom
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