Thoughts are scattered
Reaching, grabbing
Missing
Unable to grasp
Can’t respond
Don’t know how
Thoughts are a mess
Contradicting
Who will win
Too much to say
No guts
Want to, but can’t
So I’m writing
Writing these words
My thoughts
1.2.08
Not sure quite yet.
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I like it very much through about the first half of it. You then go from 2nd person to 1st person and kind of lose me in the process. I think with just a little tweaking this could be a good one.
I think the line "Who will win" starts away from the central idea. Either follow it, or change it.
My thoughts are scattered
I’m reaching, grabbing
Missing
Unable to grasp
Can’t respond
Don’t know how
Thoughts are a mess
Contradicting
Too much to say
No guts
Want to, but can’t
So I’m writing
Writing these words
My thoughts
Would this be better? I changed it to 1st person.
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