She’s so alive
beaming with life
happier than a
little boy and his brand new
puppy
she’s a new person
coming to terms with herself
loveing an d accepting
she accels
she’s growing up
full of love and life
5.18.08
Monday, July 14, 2008
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I like the spirit of this poem--it's the exhilaration of self-love and acceptance and coming into one's own. Again, would encourage you to think of more ways to describe these feelings, like you did with the boy and his puppy example--but even just a broader word choice. Like--instead of repeating life/alive, and loving/love---maybe some of the "life" references could be "spirit" or "energy" or whatever synonyms might describe it.
And, think about--is this a big change in feeling in her life? What caused it? Why?
Picky comments again: "loving" not loveing, and "excels" not accels.
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