She wants a family
full of love and understanding
her greatest wish
to feel wanted
she has a family
full of love and understanding
her greatest wish
to feel worthy
she carries her own weight
unsure of trust and honesty
she searches for
unconditional love
she depends on those around her
taking the trust for granted
she searches for
excuses and reasoning
she is hope
she is future
she is determin
she is freewill
she is strong
they are girls
5.27.08
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I liked the juxtaposition of these stanzas, and how you've given voice to the yearnings and fears and realities of girls.
The last stanza--given the alternating font in the previous stanzas (regular and italic), I was wondering if the alternating lines in the last stanza related back to each stanza, if that makes sense. Does "she is hope" relate to the first stanza, and "she is future" relate to the second, etc.? I thought that at first, but then there were two more lines than there are stanzas.
What threw me a little bit was the last line, because every other reference is to "she", and then the last line is "they". I wonder if you could just end with "girls"
-- repeating the title of the poem. Or change to "they are hope", etc. then "they are girls". Just thoughts....
Two picky comments about the last stanza: "determined" not determin; and "free will" not freewill.
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